[Detnet] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-detnet-bounded-latency-09: (with COMMENT)

[Lars Eggert via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-detnet-bounded-latency-09: No Objection

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Section 11.2. , paragraph 7, comment:
>    [IEEE8021Qcr]
>               IEEE 802.1, "IEEE P802.1Qcr: IEEE Draft Standard for Local
>               and metropolitan area networks - Bridges and Bridged
>               Networks - Amendment: Asynchronous Traffic Shaping", 2017,
>               <http://www.ieee802.org/1/files/private/cr-drafts/>.

Please link to a public version of this document, if possible.

The document has six authors, which exceeds the recommended author limit. I
assume the sponsoring AD has agreed that this is appropriate?

Thanks to Gyan S. Mishra for their General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/yMbUVrUjPZYqHTfNd8XwqMwg0FI).

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All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
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will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

Document references draft-ietf-detnet-controller-plane-framework-00, but -01 is
the latest available revision.

These URLs in the document did not return content:
 * http://www.ieee802.org/1/files/private/cr-drafts/

These URLs in the document can probably be converted to HTTPS:
 * http://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/8403927
 * http://www.ieee802.org/1/

Section 6.4. , paragraph 6, nit:
> cussed in Section 4.2.2; an interleaved regulators does not increase the dela
>                          ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
The plural noun "regulators" cannot be used with the article "an". Did you mean
"an interleaved regulator" or "interleaved regulators"?

Section 6.4.2. , paragraph 9, nit:
> T, CQF with more buffers can be used and a cycle identification label can be
>                                     ^^^^
Use a comma before "and" if it connects two independent clauses (unless they
are closely connected and short).

Section 6.6. , paragraph 3, nit:
> to entrance of the first node in sub-network 2, and d3_p the delay bound of p
>                                  ^^^^^^^^^^^
This word is normally spelled as one. (Also elsewhere.)