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Re: [Detnet] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-ip-preof-08

Joel Halpern <jmh.direct@joelhalpern.com> Wed, 20 December 2023 15:28 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Detnet] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-ip-preof-08
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Fixing it with the RFC Editor works for me.  Thank you.  Joel

On 12/20/2023 5:13 AM, Balázs Varga A wrote:
> Hi Joel,
> Many thanks for the review. Regarding the editorial comment:
> - PREOF appears first in the abstract, so it is elaborated there.
> If You think it is necessary to do so in the introduction as well,
> we can fix it with the RFC editor.
> Thanks & Cheers
> Bala'zs
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Joel Halpern via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org>
> Sent: Tuesday, December 19, 2023 3:39 PM
> To: gen-art@ietf.org
> Cc: detnet@ietf.org; draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-ip-preof.all@ietf.org; last-call@ietf.org
> Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-ip-preof-08
>
> Reviewer: Joel Halpern
> Review result: Ready with Nits
>
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
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> Document: draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-ip-preof-08
> Reviewer: Joel Halpern
> Review Date: 2023-12-19
> IETF LC End Date: 2023-12-22
> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
>
> Summary: This document is ready for publication as an Informational RFC
>
> Major issues: N/A
>
> Minor issues: N/A
>
> Nits/editorial comments:
>      The term PREOF is used without any expansion or definition in the
>      introduction.  Some elaboration of the term should be included at first
>      usage. It may make sense to define F-label even though all the references
>      to it in this document are saying that it is not used.  As a reader, I was
>      left inferring what was not being done.
>

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