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From: Balázs Varga A <balazs.a.varga@ericsson.com>
To: Joel Halpern <jmh@joelhalpern.com>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [Detnet] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-ip-preof-08
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Hi Joel,
Many thanks for the review. Regarding the editorial comment:
- PREOF appears first in the abstract, so it is elaborated there.
If You think it is necessary to do so in the introduction as well,
we can fix it with the RFC editor.
Thanks & Cheers
Bala'zs

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Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-ip-preof-08

Reviewer: Joel Halpern
Review result: Ready with Nits

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

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Document: draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-ip-preof-08
Reviewer: Joel Halpern
Review Date: 2023-12-19
IETF LC End Date: 2023-12-22
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This document is ready for publication as an Informational RFC

Major issues: N/A

Minor issues: N/A

Nits/editorial comments:
    The term PREOF is used without any expansion or definition in the
    introduction.  Some elaboration of the term should be included at first
    usage. It may make sense to define F-label even though all the references
    to it in this document are saying that it is not used.  As a reader, I was
    left inferring what was not being done.

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