[Ecrit] draft-ietf-ecrit-additional-data-10: Comments that shouldn't be controversial

"STARK, BARBARA H" <bs7652@att.com> Wed, 31 July 2013 17:11 UTC

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Subject: [Ecrit] draft-ietf-ecrit-additional-data-10: Comments that shouldn't be controversial
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I've grouped all of my comments that I don't expect to be controversial (or to require much discussion) in this email.
I also provided the authors with a set of spelling errors that I'm not going to send to the list.

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2. Terminology
'Conditional': means they must be present unless the specified
condition is met, in which case the they may be present.

Comment 23: "unless the specified condition is met" is not right. One possibility would be "if the specific condition is met".
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3.1.2. Data Provider ID

Use : Conditional. Must be provided if the service provider is
located in a jurisdiction that maintains such ids . Devices are
not required to provide it.

Description: A jurisdiction specific code for the provider shown in
the <DataProvidedBy> element that created the structure of the
call. This data SHOULD be provided if the local jurisdiction
maintains such an ID list. For example, in North America, this
would be a "NENA Company ID". Devices SHOULD NOT use this
element.

Comment 24: Normative language from Description belongs in Use
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3.1.6. Data Provider Languages(s) Supported

Use: Conditional

Description: The language used by the entity at the Data Provider
Contact URI as an alpha 2-character code as defined in ISO
639-1:2002 Codes for the representation of names of languages --
Part 1: Alpha-2 code Multiple instances of this element may occur.
Order is significant; preferred language should appear first.
This data is required if a Data Provider Contact URI is provided.
The content must reflect the languages supported at the contact
URI.

Comment 25: Conditional on what? Should the conditional sentence in Description (penultimate sentence) be moved to Use to be consistent with other Use fields?
Comment 26: Since Contact URI is required, and this field is conditional upon a required field, doesn't that make this required?
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3.3.6. Device/Service Specific Additional Data Structure
VEDs / VEDS
Comment 26: I don't know this acronym. Can you spell it out? And use it consistently (VEDs or VEDS)?
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7. Security Considerations
PKI
Comment 27: Spell this out.

[Ecrit] draft-ietf-ecrit-additional-data-10: Comm… STARK, BARBARA H
Re: [Ecrit] draft-ietf-ecrit-additional-data-10: … Hannes Tschofenig