[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-hethmon-mcmurray-ftpext-ftp-hosts-03

[Meral Shirazipour <[e-mail]>]

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq  .

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: draft-hethmon-mcmurray-ftpext-ftp-hosts-03
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2013-10-18
IETF LC End Date: 2013-10-18
IESG Telechat date: 2013-10-24


Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Standard RFC but I do have some comments.


Nits/editorial comments:
Overall the draft was a bit hard to read but given the long time it has been around I presume it has passed implementers' test when it comes to clarity.
Here are a few comments:
-[Page 1], Asbtract: A sentence is missing between 1st and 2nd sentence: it should say what is the problem with the fact stated in the 1st sentence.
-[Page 5], typo, "accomodate"-->"accommodate"  (two occurrences)
-[Page 11] section 3.2.2. "the the server-PI "----> extra "the"
-[Page 17], Section 3.3 "or otherwise chooses not conform" --> not clear what is not conform
-[Page 18], Section 4, not clear what this sentence means:
"a server implementation
   MUST treat an additional HOST command that was sent before a user has
   been authenticated as though a previous HOST command was not sent.
"

Best Regards,
Meral

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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson
Research
www.ericsson.com