Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-hethmon-mcmurray-ftpext-ftp-hosts-03

Hi,
  Thank you Robert.

Best,
Meral

-----Original Message-----
From: Robert McMurray [mailto:robmcm@microsoft.com] 
Sent: Thursday, October 24, 2013 9:05 AM
To: Jari Arkko; Meral Shirazipour
Cc: draft-hethmon-mcmurray-ftpext-ftp-hosts.all@tools.ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org
Subject: RE: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-hethmon-mcmurray-ftpext-ftp-hosts-03

Hello everyone,

I replied to Jari's questions in a separate email, but here are my answers again since they address two of Meral's questions:

The statement on page 17 that reads "chooses not conform" might work just as well (if not better) as " does not conform"; I can make that change if you think that is clearer to readers.

The statement on page 18 means that if an FTP server receives a HOST command, and then it receives another HOST command before a user has been authenticated, the FTP server must treat that situation as if the first HOST command was not received.

Here are my responses to Meral's remaining questions:

Page 1 - The problem is actually defined in the 1st sentence of the abstract, then addressed in the 2nd sentence.

Page 5 - I changed the two occurrences where "accommodate" was misspelled.

Page 11 - I removed the repeated word "the" from the sentence.

Thanks.

On Oct 19, 2013, at 1:14 PM, Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> wrote:

> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq  .
>  
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.
>  
> Document: draft-hethmon-mcmurray-ftpext-ftp-hosts-03
> Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
> Review Date: 2013-10-18
> IETF LC End Date: 2013-10-18
> IESG Telechat date: 2013-10-24
>  
>  
> Summary:
> This draft is ready to be published as Standard RFC but I do have some comments.
>  
>  
> Nits/editorial comments:
> Overall the draft was a bit hard to read but given the long time it has been around I presume it has passed implementers' test when it comes to clarity.
> Here are a few comments:
> -[Page 1], Asbtract: A sentence is missing between 1st and 2nd sentence: it should say what is the problem with the fact stated in the 1st sentence.
> -[Page 5], typo, "accomodate"-->"accommodate"  (two occurrences) 
> -[Page 11] section 3.2.2. "the the server-PI "----> extra "the"
> -[Page 17], Section 3.3 "or otherwise chooses not conform" --> not 
> clear what is not conform -[Page 18], Section 4, not clear what this sentence means:
> "a server implementation
>    MUST treat an additional HOST command that was sent before a user has
>    been authenticated as though a previous HOST command was not sent.
> "
>  
> Best Regards,
> Meral
>  
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