[Gen-art] review of draft-dawkins-iesg-nomcom-advisor-iaoc-03.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Mon, 09 October 2017 13:16 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-dawkins-iesg-nomcom-advisor-iaoc-03.txt
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-dawkins-iesg-nomcom-advisor-iaoc-03.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20170929 IETF LC End Date: 20171016 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - ToC page 2 and 7 page 4: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - about A.1 page 5: I agree it can be critical to have flexibility in the text establishing rules. As you know the French law is fully written down so this principle verifies each time a new question happens. For instance the first time a judge had to decide about software ownership he asked how a program was presented and simply applied the law about texts even a program is not a novel because the law about texts is about texts in general. Of course this was changed by dedicated laws a few years after (unfortunately because the author of a text has a lot of rights, i.e. it was pretty good for programmers). - A.2 page 6: in [RFC7437],Section 4.6 ^ add a space after the comma - A.3 page 7: sufficent -> sufficient and qualiified -> qualified Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
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