Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-dawkins-iesg-nomcom-advisor-iaoc-03.txt

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Tue, 28 November 2017 21:21 UTC

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Francis, thanks for your review. I have entered a Yes ballot.

Alissa


> On Oct 9, 2017, at 8:56 AM, Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> wrote:
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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> Document: draft-dawkins-iesg-nomcom-advisor-iaoc-03.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20170929
> IETF LC End Date: 20171016
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> 
> Summary: Ready
> 
> Major issues: None
> 
> Minor issues: None
> 
> Nits/editorial comments: 
> - ToC page 2 and 7 page 4: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
> 
> - about A.1 page 5: I agree it can be critical to have flexibility
>  in the text establishing rules. As you know the French law is
>  fully written down so this principle verifies each time a new
>  question happens. For instance the first time a judge had to decide
>  about software ownership he asked how a program was presented and
>  simply applied the law about texts even a program is not a novel
>  because the law about texts is about texts in general. Of course
>  this was changed by dedicated laws a few years after (unfortunately
>  because the author of a text has a lot of rights, i.e. it was pretty
>  good for programmers).
> 
> - A.2 page 6: in [RFC7437],Section 4.6
>                            ^ add a space after the comma
> 
> - A.3 page 7: sufficent -> sufficient and qualiified -> qualified
> 
> Regards
> 
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr