Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-dmm-hnprenum-05
"Z.W. Yan" <yan@cnnic.cn> Mon, 13 February 2017 00:45 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-dmm-hnprenum-05
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Dear Meral, Thank you so much for your comments to polish this draft. Do we need to submit a new version based on your comments now? Best Regards, Zhiwei Yan 2017-02-13 Z.W. Yan 发件人： Meral Shirazipour 发送时间： 2017-02-11 06:04:41 收件人： draft-ietf-dmm-hnprenum.all@tools.ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org 抄送： 主题： Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-dmm-hnprenum-05 I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-dmm-hnprenum-05 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2017-02-10 IETF LC End Date: 2017-02-10 IESG Telechat date: - Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have comments. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: -Abstract: Current: "However, the current PMIPv6 specification does not specify related operations when an HNP renumbering is happened.". Suggestion for more clarity: "However, the current PMIPv6 specification does not specify related operations when an HNP renumbering has happened (e.g. due to change of service provider, change of site topology, etc.).". -[Page 3], "to an MAG"---->"to a MAG" -[Page 7], "the proceduer"--->"the procedure" Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-… Meral Shirazipour
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Z.W. Yan
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Z.W. Yan
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Suresh Krishnan