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Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Fri, 10 February 2017 22:04 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
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Document: draft-ietf-dmm-hnprenum-05
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-02-10
IETF LC End Date:   2017-02-10
IESG Telechat date: -


Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have comments.

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-Abstract:
Current:
"However, the current PMIPv6 specification does not specify related operations when an HNP renumbering is happened.".
Suggestion for more clarity:
"However, the current PMIPv6 specification does not specify related operations when an HNP renumbering has happened (e.g. due to change of service provider, change of site topology, etc.).".
-[Page 3], "to an MAG"---->"to a MAG"

-[Page 7], "the proceduer"--->"the procedure"

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com

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