Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mpls-ip-options-05.txt
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Hi Miguel, Many thanks for your review. Regarding your nits/editorial comments: >- Please expand acronyms at first occurrence. This includes: MPLS MPLS is on the RFC Editor's list of acronyms that are "well known". So we're inclined not to expand it. >- This is also very personal, but I think the presence of the word "Requirements" in the title of the draft may mislead the reader, thinking that this document just contains a collection of functional requirements but does not affect a protocol implementation. Since the draft proposes real actions at LERs, then I would suggest to remove "Requirements for" from the title. The current title was specifically recommended by active members of the MPLS WG. So we're inclined not to change it. Adrian - Let us know if you think otherwise. We'll change if required. Regards, /dave -----Original Message----- From: Miguel A. Garcia [mailto:Miguel.A.Garcia@ericsson.com] Sent: Monday, November 29, 2010 6:36 AM To: wjaeger@att.com; John Mullooly (jmullool); tscholl@nlayer.net; David Smith (djsmith); George Swallow (swallow); Adrian Farrel; General Area Review Team Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mpls-ip-options-05.txt I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq Please resolve these comments along with any other comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ip-options-05.txt Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <miguel.a.garcia@ericsson.com> Review Date: 2010-11-29 IETF LC End Date: 2010-11-30 IESG Telechat date: (if known) Summary: The documetn is ready for publication as a proposed standard RFC. Major issues: none Minor issues: none Nits/editorial comments: - Please expand acronyms at first occurrence. This includes: MPLS - This is also very personal, but I think the presence of the word "Requirements" in the title of the draft may mislead the reader, thinking that this document just contains a collection of functional requirements but does not affect a protocol implementation. Since the draft proposes real actions at LERs, then I would suggest to remove "Requirements for" from the title. Other than that, the document looks good. /Miguel -- Miguel A. Garcia +34-91-339-3608 Ericsson Spain
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mpls-ip-op… Miguel A. Garcia
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mpls-i… David Smith (djsmith)
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mpls-i… Adrian Farrel