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Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-teas-gmpls-lsp-fastreroute-09.txt

"Rakesh Gandhi (rgandhi)" <rgandhi@cisco.com> Tue, 11 July 2017 15:29 UTC

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From: "Rakesh Gandhi (rgandhi)" <rgandhi@cisco.com>
To: Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Thank you Francis for the review and your comments.

Please find attached diff file with the suggested changes.

I could not understand your following comment. Are you suggesting to remove last “e” from “Acklowledge” ?

     - ToC page 3 and Acknowledgments page 21:
       Acknowledgements -> AcknowledgDements
    

Thanks,
Rakesh


On 2017-07-08, 5:01 AM, "Francis Dupont" <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> wrote:

    I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
    Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
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    Document: draft-ietf-teas-gmpls-lsp-fastreroute-09.txt
    Reviewer: Francis Dupont
    Review Date: 20170706
    IETF LC End Date: 20170707
    IESG Telechat date: unknown
    
    Summary: Ready
    
    Major issues: None
    
    Minor issues: None
    
    Nits/editorial comments: 
     - ToC page 3 and Acknowledgments page 21:
       Acknowledgements -> AcknowledgDements
    
     - 1 page 4: you should introduce the LSP abbrev too (BTW if GMPLS
      is a well known abbrev cf
      https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt
      LSP is not, IMHO because this abbrev has some other meanings in
      the IETF scope)
    
     - 4.5.1 page 9: The Node-ID address must match the source -> MUST
      or has to
    
     - 4.5.1 page 9: may -> can (RFC 2119 did not clearly specify that
      keywords are only in uppercase. Note only the previous item is
      really ambiguous).
    
     - 5.1 page 11 and 5.2.2 page 14: e.g. -> e.g.,
    
     - 5.3 page 15 and 6 page 16: may -> can
    
     - 11.1 page 20 RFC3473: should be ReserVation -> ReSerVation
      but the bug is in the RFC 3473 title please don't fix...
    
     - Contributors page 21:
      * Orange CH is ambiguous: there are some cities named Orange,
       for instance a medium one in France. I suggest to put the CH
       on the next line
      * China -> PR China or CN (i.e., follow UPU or IETF specs)
    
    Thanks
    
    Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr

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