Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-psamp-info-10.txt

Hi Vijay,

Thanks for reviewing the draft.
See inline.
> I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
> reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
> http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
>
> Please wait for direction from your document shepherd
> or AD before posting a new version of the draft.
>
> Document: draft-ietf-psamp-info-10.txt
> Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
> Review Date: 29 Sept. 2008
> IETF LC End Date: 29 Sept. 2008
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
>
> Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed
> Standard.  Some feedback on the draft below:
>
> - S1, first paragraph, third sentence says
>   "A standardized way for the export and storage is required."
>
>   Question: Storage of what?  I suspect that you mean "A standardized
>   way for the export and storage of Information Elements defined
>   in Section 8 is required."
Right.
> - Nit: S2. second paragraph:
>   s/Selection", describes/Selection" describes
Yes.
>
> - S9, the normative MUST in the second paragraph appears to be
>   misplaced.  Instead, it would seem that the "must" appearing
>   in the next paragraph ought to be made normative.  That is,
>   in the following paragraph:
>
>       The underlying protocol used to exchange the information
>       described here must therefore apply appropriate
>       procedures to guarantee the integrity and confidentiality
>       of the exported information
>
>   s/must/MUST
And again, that makes sense.

Regards, Benoit.
>
> Thanks,
>
> - vijay

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