[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-psamp-info-10.txt
"Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@alcatel-lucent.com> Mon, 29 September 2008 20:20 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-psamp-info-10.txt
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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-psamp-info-10.txt Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani Review Date: 29 Sept. 2008 IETF LC End Date: 29 Sept. 2008 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard. Some feedback on the draft below: - S1, first paragraph, third sentence says "A standardized way for the export and storage is required." Question: Storage of what? I suspect that you mean "A standardized way for the export and storage of Information Elements defined in Section 8 is required." - Nit: S2. second paragraph: s/Selection", describes/Selection" describes - S9, the normative MUST in the second paragraph appears to be misplaced. Instead, it would seem that the "must" appearing in the next paragraph ought to be made normative. That is, in the following paragraph: The underlying protocol used to exchange the information described here must therefore apply appropriate procedures to guarantee the integrity and confidentiality of the exported information s/must/MUST Thanks, - vijay -- Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent 2701 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9F-546, Lisle, Illinois 60532 (USA) Email: vkg@{alcatel-lucent.com,bell-labs.com,acm.org} WWW: http://www.alcatel-lucent.com/bell-labs _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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