[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-opsec-ip-security-05
"Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@bell-labs.com> Mon, 03 January 2011 18:00 UTC
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From: "Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@bell-labs.com>
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-opsec-ip-security-05
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-opsec-ip-security-05 Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani Review Date: Jan-03-2011 IETF LC End Date: Dec-12-2010 IESG Telechat date: Unknown Summary: This draft is ready as an Informational RFC. Major issues: 0 Minor issues: 0 Nits/editorial comments: 9 Sorry for the late review, I note that this document is in IESG evaluation state, so I suspect that one more revision may be required. If so, I hope the following feedback aids in improving an already excellent document. 1) S3.3.2.2, page 14 --- please expand the acronym "RED" on first use. 2) S3.5.1, top of end of page 16 and top of page 17 --- "Linux (and Solaris) later set the IP Identification field on a per-IP address basis." Which address --- source or destination? 3) S3.5.2.2, page 18 --- s/Packet loss is can be/Packet loss can be/ 4) S3.6, underneath Figure 5 on page 20 --- s/In Figure 3, an attacker/In Figure 5, an attacker/ 5) Same section, same page --- s/router that encounters that this/router to determine that this/ 6) S3.7 --- when discussing the Fragment Offset, is it worth stating that the Fragment Offset is measured in units of 8 octets (thereby giving the magic number 65528 = 8191*8)? 7) S3.8.4, page 26, last bullet item at top of page --- s/Four hops away from D./Two hops away from D./ 8) S4.1.1.3, page 51, last paragraph of that subsection --- Any references? 9) S4.1.1.4, page 52, first bullet item, first sentence --- what do you mean by "overlapping fragments"? Maybe you meant, instead, "duplicate fragments"? Thanks, - vijay -- Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent 1960 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9C-533, Naperville, Illinois 60566 (USA) Email: vkg@{alcatel-lucent.com,bell-labs.com,acm.org} Web: http://ect.bell-labs.com/who/vkg/
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-opsec-ip-s… Vijay K. Gurbani
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-opsec-… Fernando Gont
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-opsec-… Vijay K. Gurbani
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-opsec-… Fernando Gont