[Gen-art] review of draft-farrell-decade-ni-07/08.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Mon, 09 July 2012 13:14 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
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Document: draft-farrell-decade-ni-07/08.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20120704
IETF LC End Date: 20120702
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: there were some issues raised in the mailing list but
solved (?) in the last version (I reviewed an intermediate 07-08 version,
last is 09 today).

Minor issues: (not technical) more than 5 authors

Nits/editorial comments:
 - Toc and 11 page 18: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
  (i.e., American English vs. GB one)

 - 1 page 4, 3 page 8, 9.4 page 15: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - 4 page 9, 7 page 11: i.e. -> i.e.,