Re: [Gen-art] Gen-art LC review of draft-ietf-dane-ops-12 (re Version 13)
Elwyn Davies <elwynd@dial.pipex.com> Fri, 03 July 2015 14:01 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-art LC review of draft-ietf-dane-ops-12 (re Version 13)
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Hi, Viktor.
I had a quick look through the new version 13 and it has addressed
almost all the various nits I identified and looked at the issues I
mentioned.
I am not totally convinced about the remaining usage of RFC 2118
keywords, but I'll leave that for the ADs to consider. Barry Leiba (if
I remember correctly) is particularly exercised about this area - might
be worth having a word with him.
There are a couple of nits introduced by the edits (or left over from
the previous version):
s3, para 2: s/ When a servers does/When a server does/,
s/SHOULD respond/the server SHOULD respond/
s10.1, next to last para: s/as when significantly/as the full
certificates are significantly/
s12, bullet 4: s/to processes extended/to process extended/
s14, last para: s/PKIX-TA(0(/PKIX-TA(0)/
Regards,
Elwyn
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-art LC review of draft-ietf-dan… Elwyn Davies
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-art LC review of draft-ietf-dan… Stephen Farrell