[Gen-art] Last Call review of draft-ietf-dmm-distributed-mobility-anchoring-13

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Document: draft-ietf-dmm-distributed-mobility-anchoring-13
Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
Review Date: 2019-10-12
IETF LC End Date: 2019-10-14
IESG Telechat date: ?

Summary:

This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should 
be fixed before publication.

General:

I found that I lack the subject matter expertise to meaningfully review 
this document. I read it carefully, along with one of the references. 
But it appeared that I would need to internalize quite a number of other 
references before it would be possible to really follow this.

I did review it for form - the document is well written. (Most documents 
that I review have at least a few problems with form.)

IdNits returns a couple of outdated references that should be cleaned up:

   == Outdated reference: A later version (-18) exists of
      draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility-17

   == Outdated reference: A later version (-02) exists of
      draft-ietf-rtgwg-atn-bgp-01

I have no other comments.