[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-radius-requirements-03.txt

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Document: draft-ietf-mip4-radius-requirements-03.txt
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: 15 Jun 2007
IESG Telechat date: 21 Jun 2007

Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational.
Three nits:

1) Section 1: s/[RFC3957] all based/[RFC3957], all based
    (The comma improves readibility)

2) Section 3: s/reqiuired/required

3) Section 3.1: In the first and third bullet item, it appears
  appropriate that the word "required" be upper-cased to denote its
  use as a normative declaration.  More so since bullet item two
  contains the word "MUST" in normative fashion.  I believe that
  the authors are making a normative set of declarations for the
  goals, so it appears uneven to have a MUST in the second bullet
  item and not a pair of REQUIREDs in the other two bullets.

Thanks,

- vijay
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Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent
2701 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9F-546, Lisle, Illinois 60532 (USA)
Email: vkg@{alcatel-lucent.com,bell-labs.com,acm.org}
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