Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-radius-requirements-03.txt

Authors, I would like to take these comments directly
as instructions for the RFC Editor. If there's any objection,
let me know.

Jari

Vijay K. Gurbani kirjoitti:
> I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
> reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
> http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
>
> Please wait for direction from your document shepherd
> or AD before posting a new version of the draft.
>
> Document: draft-ietf-mip4-radius-requirements-03.txt
> Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
> Review Date: 15 Jun 2007
> IESG Telechat date: 21 Jun 2007
>
> Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational.
> Three nits:
>
> 1) Section 1: s/[RFC3957] all based/[RFC3957], all based
>    (The comma improves readibility)
>
> 2) Section 3: s/reqiuired/required
>
> 3) Section 3.1: In the first and third bullet item, it appears
>  appropriate that the word "required" be upper-cased to denote its
>  use as a normative declaration.  More so since bullet item two
>  contains the word "MUST" in normative fashion.  I believe that
>  the authors are making a normative set of declarations for the
>  goals, so it appears uneven to have a MUST in the second bullet
>  item and not a pair of REQUIREDs in the other two bullets.
>
> Thanks,
>
> - vijay

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