Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-mofrr-06
IJsbrand Wijnands <ice@cisco.com> Mon, 18 May 2015 07:11 UTC
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From: IJsbrand Wijnands <ice@cisco.com>
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Date: Mon, 18 May 2015 09:11:38 +0200
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-mofrr-06
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Hi Russ, Thanks again for your review and sorry for having missed this email. I’ve adopted your suggestions and incorporated them into version -08. (attached).
Thx, Ice. > On 14 May 2015, at 00:39, Jari Arkko <jari.arkko@piuha.net> wrote: > > Thanks for your review, Russ. > > For what it is worth, I do not see any changes relating to your comments in the -07. Have you authors seen Russ’ comments? > > Jari > > On 17 Apr 2015, at 18:25, Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com> wrote: > >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on >> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at >> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >> >> This review is in response to a request for early Gen-ART review. >> >> Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-mofrr-06 >> Reviewer: Russ Housley >> Review Date: 2015-04-17 >> IETF LC End Date: 2015-04-30 >> IESG Telechat date: unknown >> >> Summary: Almost Ready >> >> >> Major Concerns: >> >> None >> >> >> Minor Concerns: >> >> Please add POP to the list of terms in Section 1.2. >> >> The introduction to Section 6 really only talks about Section 6.1. >> Perhaps Sections 6 and 6.1 should be merged. If they are merged, it >> could look like this: >> >> 6. MoFRR Applicability to Dual-Plane Topology >> >> MoFRR applicability is topology dependent. The applicability is the >> same as LFA FRR which is discussed in [RFC6571]. >> >> MoFRR works best in dual-planes topologies as illustrated in the >> figures below. MoFRR may be enabled on any router in the network. >> In the figures below, MoFRR is shown enabled on the Provider Edge >> (PE) routers to illustrate one way in which the technology may be >> deployed. >> >> . . . >> >> If this suggestion is taken, Sections 6.2, 6.3, and 6.4 could become >> top-level sections of their own. >> >> >> Other Comments: >> >> The figures are referenced in many ways: FIG3, Fig3, and Fig 3. >> Please pick one style and use it throughout the document. >> >> Section 1, 2nd paragraph: add a period at the end of the paragraph. >> >> Section 1.2, LFA definition: add a period after the first sentence. >> >> Section 4, intro paragraph: Delete " See below;" from the end. >> >> Section 5, 1st paragraph: s/section explore some/section explores some/ >> >
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-mofr… Russ Housley
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-… Jari Arkko
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-… IJsbrand Wijnands