Re: [Gen-art] draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8022bis: Re: review of https://pad.isc.org/p/Kea_Planning

Re: [Gen-art] draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8022bis: Re: review of https://pad.isc.org/p/Kea_Planning_2018-01-25 (update)

"Acee Lindem (acee)" <acee@cisco.com> Fri, 26 January 2018 13:07 UTC

From: "Acee Lindem (acee)" <acee@cisco.com>
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Hi Francis, 
 
Thanks for the review. See inline. 

On 1/26/18, 3:29 AM, "Benoit Claise (bclaise)" <bclaise@cisco.com> wrote:

    Hi Francis,
    > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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    >
    > Document: draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8022bis-09.txt
    > Reviewer: Francis Dupont
    > Review Date: 20180123
    > IETF LC End Date: 20180115
    > IESG Telechat date: 20180125
    >
    > Summary: Ready
    >
    > Major issues: None
    >
    > Minor issues: None
    >
    > Nits/editorial comments: (update)
    >   I noted these on the 06 version but I refer to 09 (last) version which
    > has been published since my review.
    >
    >   - 2 page 3: update RFC 2119 by RFC 8174 (or leave the RFC Editor to do
    >    this)

This was updated based on a previous comment from Ben Campbell. 

    >
    >   - Appendix E page 74 (twice): control-plane-protocl -> control-plane-protocol
    Good catch.
    I introduced an IESG note for this.


I fixed this in the -11 version to assure it wouldn't be missed.

Thanks,
Acee 
    
    Regards, Benoit
    >
    > I trust Yangdoctor about yang correctness.
    >
    > Thanks
    >
    > Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
    > .
    >

[Gen-art] review of https://pad.isc.org/p/Kea_Pla… Francis Dupont
[Gen-art] draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8022bis: Re: revie… Benoit Claise
Re: [Gen-art] draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8022bis: Re: r… Acee Lindem (acee)