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Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-03.txt

"Carlos Pignataro (cpignata)" <cpignata@cisco.com> Wed, 29 October 2014 14:52 UTC

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From: "Carlos Pignataro (cpignata)" <cpignata@cisco.com>
To: Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr>
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Many thanks, Francis, for this review! All nits acknowledged and fixed.

Thanks,

Carlos.

> On Oct 29, 2014, at 9:56 AM, Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> wrote:
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
> 
> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
> 
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
> you may receive.
> 
> Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-03.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20141025
> IETF LC End Date: 20141027
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> 
> Summary: Ready
> 
> Major issues: None
> 
> Minor issues: None
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> - ToC page 2 and 5 page 18: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
> 
> - 3.2.6 page 8: singaling -> signaling
> 
> - 3.3.1 page 9: e.g. -> e.g.,
> 
> - 3.3.2.4.1 pages 11 and 12: the conclusion (Gap: None) doesn't seem
>  very in phase with the text. Perhaps it is another case of "out of scope
>  known gap"?
> 
> - 3.4.2 page 15 (UK vs US spelling): behaviour -> behavior
> 
> - 4 page 17: Identifed -> Identified
> 
> - 6 pages 18 and 19, Authors' Addresses page 26: I don't like
>  ISO IS 3166 two letter codes used in postal addresses but it seems
>  to be what the new RFC required...
> 
> Regards
> 
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
> 
> PS: I reviewed the 02 version but now the 03 was published so I updated
> my comments. rfcdiff shows 03 is better than 02 at the exception of:
> - in 3.3.1.1 page 9 perhaps a missing '<' as I can see:
>    ... (see xref    
>    target="LDP"/>).
> PPS: it could be useful to have a checklist of all RFCs which should
> be updated but it is more a task for the WG than something to put
> in the document (I don't follow the WG so I don't know if it already
> exists :-).

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