Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-03.txt
Jari Arkko <jari.arkko@ericsson.com> Tue, 25 November 2014 15:53 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-03.txt
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Thank you very much Francis and Carlos. Jari On 29 Oct 2014, at 15:52, Carlos Pignataro (cpignata) <cpignata@cisco.com> wrote: > Many thanks, Francis, for this review! All nits acknowledged and fixed. > > Thanks, > > Carlos. > >> On Oct 29, 2014, at 9:56 AM, Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> wrote: >> >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on >> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at >> >> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >> >> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments >> you may receive. >> >> Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-03.txt >> Reviewer: Francis Dupont >> Review Date: 20141025 >> IETF LC End Date: 20141027 >> IESG Telechat date: unknown >> >> Summary: Ready >> >> Major issues: None >> >> Minor issues: None >> >> Nits/editorial comments: >> - ToC page 2 and 5 page 18: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments >> >> - 3.2.6 page 8: singaling -> signaling >> >> - 3.3.1 page 9: e.g. -> e.g., >> >> - 3.3.2.4.1 pages 11 and 12: the conclusion (Gap: None) doesn't seem >> very in phase with the text. Perhaps it is another case of "out of scope >> known gap"? >> >> - 3.4.2 page 15 (UK vs US spelling): behaviour -> behavior >> >> - 4 page 17: Identifed -> Identified >> >> - 6 pages 18 and 19, Authors' Addresses page 26: I don't like >> ISO IS 3166 two letter codes used in postal addresses but it seems >> to be what the new RFC required... >> >> Regards >> >> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr >> >> PS: I reviewed the 02 version but now the 03 was published so I updated >> my comments. rfcdiff shows 03 is better than 02 at the exception of: >> - in 3.3.1.1 page 9 perhaps a missing '<' as I can see: >> ... (see xref >> target="LDP"/>). >> PPS: it could be useful to have a checklist of all RFCs which should >> be updated but it is more a task for the WG than something to put >> in the document (I don't follow the WG so I don't know if it already >> exists :-). > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
- [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only… Carlos Pignataro (cpignata)
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only… Jari Arkko