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[Gen-art] review of draft-levin-mmusic-xml-media-control-12.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Wed, 14 November 2007 18:31 UTC

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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
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Document: draft-levin-mmusic-xml-media-control-12.txt 
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2007-11-14
IETF LC End Date: 2007-12-15
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Comments: I have no approved tool to check the XML schema and examples,
BTW is there such a thing? XML Doctors?
My comments are only editorial comments, i.e., they should be handled
by the RFC Editor:
 - Abstract page 2: described method described (only one described please :-)
 - 1 page 3: RFC-2119 -> RFC 2119 (in order to make search easier I'd like
  to limit the number of ways to cite an RFC)
 - 3 page 4: document[7]. -> document [7].
 - 6 page 6: please expand the "UAC" abbrev.
 
Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr


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