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Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-oam-req-frmwk-04

David Schinazi <dschinazi.ietf@gmail.com> Sat, 06 February 2021 03:16 UTC

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From: David Schinazi <dschinazi.ietf@gmail.com>
Date: Fri, 05 Feb 2021 19:16:19 -0800
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To: Donald Eastlake <d3e3e3@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-oam-req-frmwk-04
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That sounds great, thanks Donald!

David

On Fri, Feb 5, 2021 at 6:34 PM Donald Eastlake <d3e3e3@gmail.com> wrote:

> Hi Dave,
>
> Thanks for the review. See below.
>
> On Fri, Feb 5, 2021 at 4:44 PM David Schinazi via Datatracker
> <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
> > Reviewer: David Schinazi
> > Review result: Ready with Nits
> >
> > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
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> >
> > Document: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-oam-req-frmwk-04
> > Reviewer: David Schinazi
> > Review Date: 2021-02-05
> > IETF LC End Date: 2021-02-16
> > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
> >
> > Summary: Thank you for a well-written document.
> >   It introduces a lot of terminology I wasn't used to,
> >   but does a good job of explaining it.
> >
> > Major issues: None
> >
> > Minor issues: None
> >
> > Nits/editorial comments:
> >   - The abstract defines all the acronyms (which is great) except PBB,
> could it define that one too?
> >   - Section 2.1 doesn't really explain what a "P node" is.
>
> Sure, we can expand PBB (Provider Backbone Bridge) in the abstract and
> say in Section 2.1 that P is Provider. These should probably also be
> added to the terminology section. I've made these changes in the
> working copy but they are pretty minor so I think I'll wait for the
> results of other reviews before uploading a new version.
>
> Thanks,
> Donald
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