[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-turner-deviceowner-attribute-01
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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html <http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html> ). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-turner-deviceowner-attribute-01 Reviewer: Pete McCann Review Date: 2009-08-27 IETF LC End Date: 2009-08-28 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Almost Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: The Abstract and Introduction are worded in a way similar to draft-turner-clearancesponsor-attribute-01.txt and the same re-wording should be applied as in the discussion with Joel. Nits/editorial comments: Please run the ASN.1 thorugh a syntax checker. The word "IMPLICIT" is mis-spelled in the ASN.1 in the appendix. The choice elements alphaNCountry have a different capitalization in the appendix (AlphaNCountry). The syntax checker that I tried didn't like the [0] after Alpha2Country. I am not an ASN.1 expert so perhaps this is newer syntax. It looks like there is a missing close-paren after the NumericCountry SIZE specification. It looks like there is an exra open-curly before "joint-iso-ccitt".
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-turner-deviceow… McCann Peter-A001034
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-turner-devi… Sean Turner