Re: [Gen-art] Gen-art review of draft-ietf-tcpm-ecnsyn-08.txt
Sally Floyd <sallyfloyd@mac.com> Mon, 11 May 2009 19:48 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-art review of draft-ietf-tcpm-ecnsyn-08.txt
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Gonzalo - > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. Many thanks for the feedback. > Draft: draft-ietf-tcpm-ecnsyn-08.txt > Reviewer: Gonzalo Camarillo <Gonzalo.Camarillo@ericsson.com> > Review Date: 6 May 2009 > > Summary: > > This draft is ready for publication as an experimental RFC. > > > Comments: > > In general, abstracts should not contain references. In this document > the abstract references RFC 3168. In any case, the way the abstract > references it is not particularly confusing. Therefore, the authors > may > choose to leave it as it is. > > Some references to RFC 3168 in the text do not actually include any > reference in brackets. References to an RFC should be in the form "RFC > 3168 [RFC3168] says ...". I fixed it. (My own preference would be not to add the reference [RFC3168] when it already appears earlier in the same paragraph, or in the paragraph above, but I see that the RFC Document Style manual specifies otherwise...) Thanks, - Sally http://www.icir.org/floyd/
- [Gen-art] Gen-art review of draft-ietf-tcpm-ecnsy… Gonzalo Camarillo
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-art review of draft-ietf-tcpm-e… Sally Floyd