[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-behave-dccp-03.txt

"Miguel A. Garcia" <Miguel.A.Garcia@ericsson.com> Fri, 17 October 2008 10:14 UTC

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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-behave-dccp-03.txt
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <miguel.a.garcia@ericsson.com>
Review Date: 2008-10-17
IETF LC End Date: 2008-10-20

Summary: The draft is almost ready for publication, but perhaps as a BCP 
rather than as a "proposed standard". Please see some comments below.

Comments:

1) The draft says that it is intended to become a Standards Track. 
However, this document contains a collection of requirements. Typically 
Requirements draft are assigned to the category of Informational or BCP. 
I checked other similar requirement documents in the BEHAVE WG and their 
intended status is BCP. I think this draft should be a BCP.

2) As a matter of personal taste, I don't like to mention names of 
working groups in RFCs. This is because WGs are temporal arrangements. 
They stop existing after a few years, while RFCs are permanent. So, 
"BEHAVE" might not mean anything in the near future. This comment is due 
to the reference to "BEHAVE" in the abstract.

3) I know the RFC Editor allows well-known acronyms (e.g, TCP, UDP, and 
IP). But I am not so sure if "DCCP" and "SCTP" qualifies as well-known. 
So, it might be a good idea to expand it at a first occurrence 
(including the title).

4) Typo: Section 10, 5th paragraph, remove the dot "." in the middle of 
this sentence:

    Silently dropping the
    Listen makes it harder to diagnose network problems. and forces
    applications to wait for the DCCP stack to finish several
    retransmissions before reporting an error.


/Miguel
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Miguel A. Garcia
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