[Gen-art] (full) review of draft-ietf-nfsv4-nfsdirect-06.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Fri, 12 October 2007 20:09 UTC
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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-nfsv4-nfsdirect-06.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2007-10-10 IETF LC End Date: 2007-10-12 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Almost ready Comments: I maintain my concern about the abbrevs in the Abstract even I recognize it is more from the way the nfsv4 stuff is cut out in several documents... There are some places where the wording is not so good (the RFC editor should fix them): - 5 page 6: "buffers, lest an RDMA" - 5 page 7: unbounded -> unbound - 7 page 7: are required by that: thhat -> this and BTW what is the specification, RFC 3530? - 7 page 8: the two "by IANA". Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr PS: in the batch of IETF LC reviews message I have this warning: This document contains two downward references ("downrefs"). As required by RFC 3967, the last call message for this document needs to bring these to the attention of the community. The downrefs are to specifications of earlier versions of the NFS protocol, which were published as Informational, because they had been developed outside the IETF: [RFC1094] "NFS: Network File System Protocol Specification", (NFS version 2) Informational RFC, 1989. [RFC1813] B. Callaghan, B. Pawlowski, P. Staubach, "NFS Version 3 Protocol Specification", Informational RFC, 1995. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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