[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-vpn-problem-solution-05.txt

"Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@alcatel-lucent.com> Sun, 30 March 2008 16:18 UTC

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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

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Document: draft-ietf-mip4-vpn-problem-solution-05.txt
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: 30 Mar 2008
IESG Telechat date: 31 Mar 2008

Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Proposed
Standard.

Couple of nits follow:

- S1.6, page 9: s/abovementioned/above mentioned

- S3.2.4, last paragraph: s/untypical/atypical

- S5.2, last bullet item: I could not quite follow the logic of
  how the bytes add up to 20.  But that may be my unfamiliarity
  with the domain.  I simply want to get the authors attention
  here in case there is something of consequence.  If there
  is not, then please feel free to discard this comment.

Thanks,

- vijay
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