[Gen-art] Update: Gen-ART LC/TC Review of draft-ietf-ccamp-pc-spc-rsvpte-ext-07

[Ben Campbell <[e-mail]>]

This is an update of my review of draft-ietf-ccamp-pc-spc-rsvpte-ext-06, based on the newly released version 07.

Updated Summary: Ready for publication. (I said draft standard the first time-but this is intended as a proposed standard, right?)

Major Issues: None
Minor Issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

> -- Abstract, first paragraph, first sentence:
> 
> I can't parse first part of sentence. Should "… connections are controlled …" be "…connections controlled…"? 
> 

No change--I still can't parse the first part of the sentence. Maybe the phrase "may independently exist" is the problem?
> 
> -- 2nd paragraph:
> 
> I don't see any mention of PathTear in 4.2.1.1.
> 

I think I meant to say the first paragraph, not the second. But I still don't see the term "PathTear" mentioned in 4.2.1.1.

> -- section 7.1:
> 
> Is this intended to recommend IANA choose 25?

No change. You say the bit number is (TBD by IANA) (25). Is the 25 a recommendation? (in which case, "(TBD by IANA, 25 preferred)" would be helpful.

> 
> -- section 7.2:
> 
> Do you mean to recommend a code of 35?
> 

No change--same as above.

Thanks!

Ben.