[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-hollenbeck-epp-rfc3733bis-04
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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-hollenbeck-epp-rfc3733bis-04 Reviewer: Pasi Eronen Review Date: 2006-10-17 IETF LC Date: 2006-10-12 IESG Telechat date: (not known yet) Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication. Comments: This is recycling RFC 3733 to Draft Standard, containing only very minor changes. All the comments I have are quite minor and mostly editorial in nature: 1) The document contains several references to UTF-8 like "names MAY be provided in both UTF-8 [RFC3629] and a subset of UTF-8 that can be represented in 7-bit ASCII depending on local needs." This is not quite correct. UTF-8 is an encoding that converts Unicode characters to octets. What the text probably means is that "names MAY be provided in both Unicode and a subset of Unicode..."; how Unicode is actually encoded depends on the XML declaration, and it's not necessarily UTF-8. 2) To me E.164 looks like a normative reference, not merely informative. 3) Minor editorial nits: - References: ISO 3166:1988 is a withdrawn standard; the correct document is "Codes for the representation of names of countries and their subdivisions -- Part 1: Country codes", ISO 3166-1:1997. - References: E.164 (1991) is an extremely old version; the latest approved version is E.164 (02/05). - References: W3C.REC-xml-20040204 is not the latest version of this spec; is this intentional, or should this be updated to W3C.REC-xml-20060816? - Appendix A: Section title should be "Changes from RFC 3733", not 3732 - Globally: "</epp>" -> "</eppgt>" (several instances) - Section 5: "<xref target="RFC3339"/>" -> "[RFC3339]" Best regards, Pasi _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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