[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-rfc3682bis-09.txt

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Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-rfc3682bis-09.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2007/06/10
IETF LC End Date: 2007/06/15
IESG Telechat date: not known

Summary: Almost Ready

Comments: I have only one major comment: the document does not explain
it is a revision of RFC 3682, I propose to add a sentence at the
beginning of the introduction stating that with a reference.
Other points (minor/editorial/for the RFC editor):
 - 2 page 4 in:
   "The possibility of denial-of-service (DoS) attack prevention,
   however, is based on the assumption that packet classification and
   separation of their paths is done before they go through a scarce
   resource in the system."
   two proposals: "is" -> "are" and "packet classification" ->
   "classification of (the?) packets"

 - 2.2 page 5: (i.e., trusted) -> (i.e., are trusted)

 - 5.1 page 7: hasn't -> has not

 - 5.5 page 12: multi-hop -> multi-hop case

 - 6.1 page 12: add a reference for RFC 3682 here (in fact, everywhere
   at the exception of the abstract).

 - A page 14: I can't parse "within "TrustRadius" (e.g., 1)
   of 255 instead of 255"

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr

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