[Gen-art] Re: review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-rfc3682bis-09.txt
Pekka Savola <psavola@funet.fi> Mon, 11 June 2007 18:44 UTC
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From: Pekka Savola <psavola@funet.fi>
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Subject: [Gen-art] Re: review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-rfc3682bis-09.txt
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Hi Francis, Thanks for your review. The draft does say 'obsoletes' in the Abstract and includes Appendix B on Changes since RFC 3682, but I guess we can say this explicitly. Wrt. your TrustRadius comment, the intent was to say that you would accept any value within TrustRadius from 255. I.e., with trustradius 1, 255-1 = 254 would be OK. The simplest possible fix would be replacing "of 255" with "from 255", but I'm not sure whether that would be much clearer; in fact the whole "TrustRadius" concept could be reworded out of the text given that it isn't mentioned anywhere else (anymore) The text was: The main applicability of GTSM is for directly connected peers. GTSM could be used for non-directly connected sessions as well, where the recipient would check that the TTL is within "TrustRadius" (e.g., 1) of 255 instead of 255. [...] On Mon, 11 Jun 2007, Francis Dupont wrote: > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-rfc3682bis-09.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 2007/06/10 > IETF LC End Date: 2007/06/15 > IESG Telechat date: not known > > Summary: Almost Ready > > Comments: I have only one major comment: the document does not explain > it is a revision of RFC 3682, I propose to add a sentence at the > beginning of the introduction stating that with a reference. > Other points (minor/editorial/for the RFC editor): > - 2 page 4 in: > "The possibility of denial-of-service (DoS) attack prevention, > however, is based on the assumption that packet classification and > separation of their paths is done before they go through a scarce > resource in the system." > two proposals: "is" -> "are" and "packet classification" -> > "classification of (the?) packets" > > - 2.2 page 5: (i.e., trusted) -> (i.e., are trusted) > > - 5.1 page 7: hasn't -> has not > > - 5.5 page 12: multi-hop -> multi-hop case > > - 6.1 page 12: add a reference for RFC 3682 here (in fact, everywhere > at the exception of the abstract). > > - A page 14: I can't parse "within "TrustRadius" (e.g., 1) > of 255 instead of 255" > > Regards > > Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
- [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-rfc3682bis-0… Francis Dupont
- [Gen-art] Re: review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-rfc3682b… Pekka Savola