[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-mln-reqs-08.txt
Miguel Garcia <Miguel.Garcia@nsn.com> Thu, 27 March 2008 07:30 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-mln-reqs-08.txt
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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-mln-reqs-08.txt Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <miguel.garcia@nsn.com> Review Date: 2008-03-27 IESG Telechat date: 2008-03-27 Summary: The document is ready for publication as Informational RFC. Comments: The document is clear and well written. here you have a few minor comments that may improve the text. Use them are your discretion. - The formatting of the document is a bit strange. The table of contents do not contain page numbers. Something funky with dashes (-) in the 4th paragraph of Section 1. - On Section 5.4, the text reads: Creation, deletion, and modification of LSPs MAY be triggered by adjacent layers or through operational actions to meet traffic demand changes, topology changes, signaling requests from the upper layer, and network failures. In my opinion, the normative "MAY" does not make sense, because the sentence describes an action that takes place in a different node, not a requirement for the protocol or the node itself. I suspect that the text is trying to cover a requirement saying that "It MUST be possible to create, delete, and modify LSPs triggered by adjacent layers ...." Similarly, Section 5.8.2, 6th paragraph says: Virtual TE-links MAY be added, removed or modified dynamically (by changing their capacity) according to the change of the (forecast) traffic demand and the available resource in the lower-layer. Probably the text wants to say: Virtual TE-links can be added, removed or modified dynamically (by changing their capacity) according to the change of the (forecast) traffic demand and the available resource in the lower-layer. It MUST be possible to add, remove, and modify virtual TE-links in a dynamical way. - Section 5.7, can you expand the term ERO and added to the list of acronyms? /Miguel -- Miguel A. Garcia tel:+358-50-4804586 Nokia Siemens Networks Espoo, Finland _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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