[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-l1vpn-basic-mode-04.txt
Suresh Krishnan <suresh.krishnan@ericsson.com> Wed, 26 March 2008 20:39 UTC
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From: Suresh Krishnan <suresh.krishnan@ericsson.com>
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-l1vpn-basic-mode-04.txt
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for draft-ietf-l1vpn-basic-mode-04.txt For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Summary: This draft is ready for publication but I have a suggestion. References ========== The following text occurs in the conventions section of the document. "This document expects that the reader is familiar with the terminology defined and used in [RFC3945], [RFC3471], [RFC3473], [RFC3477], [RFC4201], [RFC4202], [RFC4204], [RFC4208] and referenced therein." Since it is mandatory to read these documents all of them need to be perhaps moved into normative references. Also I feel that this text belongs better in the Introduction section than in the Conventions. Cheers Suresh _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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