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[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-storm-ipsec-ips-update-03.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Thu, 15 August 2013 08:44 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
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<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-storm-ipsec-ips-update-03.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2013-08-14
IETF LC End Date: 2013-08-19
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Almost ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues:
 - this is in fact a pure editorial concern but as it can have a big impact
  on not IETF expert readers I put it here:
  At the end of 3 page 9:
   use of IPsec v3 is recommended -> use of IPsec v3 is RECOMMENDED
 Two notes for the discussion:
  - a RFC 2119 keyword doesn't need to be capitalized
  - it is the only place with a preference for IPsec v3 over v2.

Nits/editorial comments:
 - Authors' Addresses page 16 (twice): US -> USA

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr

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