[Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-ietf-ipsecme-rfc7321bis-05
Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Tue, 14 March 2017 20:22 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-ietf-ipsecme-rfc7321bis-05
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-ipsecme-rfc7321bis-05 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2017-03-14 IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-15 IESG Telechat date: 2017-03-16 Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards RFC, but I have some comments. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: -[Page 4], "downgraded from MUST to MUST-". MUST- is defined later in the document. Perhaps a reference in the text should point to that section on p.5. -[Page 7], "were not been mentioned"---->"have not been mentioned" -[Page 7], "this document clarify"---->"this document clarifies" -[Page 11], "that revisions of that"---->"that revisions of this" -general, some acronyms are not spelled out...VPN, MTU.. -Tables P.5,6,8,9,10. Giving them a caption would make the document clearer. Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com
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