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[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Wed, 04 March 2015 16:01 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
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Document: draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20150226
IETF LC End Date: 20150302
IESG Telechat date: 20150305

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC page 2 and Appendix A page 11: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 2: even its meaning is obvious the abbrev IM is never
  introduced.

 - 1 page 3: the word groupchat does not belong formerly to the
  English language...

 - 4 page 5 (twice): acknowledgements -> acknowledgments

 - 8 page 8: signalling -> signaling

 - 11.2 page 10: the first informative reference is for a 2012 I-D.

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr

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