Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-ason-routing-ospf-07
Ben Campbell <ben@estacado.net> Wed, 08 April 2009 21:02 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-ason-routing-ospf-07
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For the record, this version addresses all of my comments. Thanks! Ben. On Apr 7, 2009, at 5:34 PM, Adrian Farrel wrote: > Hi Ben, > > New revision just out fixes the issues. > > Thanks again. > Adrian > ----- Original Message ----- From: "Ben Campbell" <ben@estacado.net> > To: "PAPADIMITRIOU Dimitri" <Dimitri.Papadimitriou@alcatel-lucent.be> > Cc: "Adrian Farrel" <adrian@olddog.co.uk>; "General Area Review > Team" <gen-art@ietf.org>; <rcallon@juniper.net>; <dward@cisco.com> > Sent: Tuesday, March 17, 2009 7:54 PM > Subject: Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-ason- > routing-ospf-07 > > >> For the record, this email along with Adrian's address all of my >> comments. >> >> Thanks! >> >> Ben. >> >> >> On Mar 13, 2009, at 8:19 AM, PAPADIMITRIOU Dimitri wrote: >> >>> Adrian: >>> >>>> -----Original Message----- >>>> From: Adrian Farrel [mailto:adrian@olddog.co.uk] >>>> Sent: Friday, March 13, 2009 2:07 PM >>>> To: Ben Campbell; PAPADIMITRIOU Dimitri; General Area Review Team >>>> Cc: rcallon@juniper.net; dward@cisco.com >>>> Subject: Re: Gen-ART LC review of >>>> draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-ason-routing-ospf-07 >>>> >>>> Hi Ben, >>>> >>>> Thanks for your review. >>>> >>>> Dimitri, need your help! >>>> See in line below. >>>> >>>> Adrian >>>> >>>>> Minor issues: >>>>> >>>>> -- Section 9.1: >>>>> >>>>> This section shows the sub-TLV types as TBD, but at least >>>> some of the >>>>> references sections specify type numbers. >>>> >>>> OK, I found section 9.1 >>>> | Value Sub-TLV >>>> Reference >>>> | ----------- -------------------------------------------- >>>> ---------- >>>> | TBD Local TE Router ID >>>> [This.ID] >>>> >>>> But, in section 5.3 >>>> | The Type of the Local TE Router-ID sub-TLV is 5 >>>> >>>> Similarly, >>>> | TBD Local and Remote TE Router ID >>>> [This.ID] >>>> >>>> But, section 5.2 >>>> | The Type of the Local and Remote TE Router-ID sub-TLV is 17 >>>> >>>> Also, >>>> | TBD Node IPv4 Local Prefix >>>> [This.ID] >>>> | TBD Node IPv6 Local Prefix >>>> [This.ID] >>>> >>>> But in section 3 >>>> | - Node IPv4 Local Prefix sub-TLV: Type 3 - Length: variable >>>> | - Node IPv6 Local Prefix sub-TLV: Type 4 - Length: variable >>>> >>>> Dimitri, are these values: >>>> - required >>>> - desired >>>> - suggested? >>> >>> The former. >>> >>>>> Nits/editorial comments: >>>>> >>>>> -- general: >>>>> >>>>> It would be helpful to have referenceable numbers for the >>>> TLV format >>>>> figures. >>>> >>>> Yeah, might be nice, but since the figures are not referenced >>>> outside the >>>> section in which they appear, I think we won't bother this time. >>> >>> usually we ref. the sub-section itself. >>> >>>>> Using non-mnemonic citations as if they were nouns in a >>>> sentence creates >>>>> extra work for the reader, who must flip back to the references >>>>> to >>>>> understand the sentence. That is, the form "...defined >>>> in [xxx]". It's >>>>> better to say "defined in foo [xxx]". It's not as bad with >>>> mnemonic >>>>> citations (e.g. "defined in [foo]"), but it can still >>>> cause confusion if >>>>> text is quoted in other documents without the associated >>>>> reference >>>>> section. >>>> >>>> Hmmm. >>>> This notation seems to be used pretty widely. >>>> I'd hate to see text that said "..defined in RFC 1234 >>>> [RFC1234]." :-) >>> >>> it is correct but as most IETF refs. are RFCs it reads often like >>> Adrian >>> states. >>> >>>>> -- section 2, 2nd paragraph: "The >>>>> limit of the subdivision results is an RA that contains just two >>>>> sub-networks interconnected by a single link." >>>>> >>>>> I don't follow the last sentence. Is it possible "results >>>> is" was meant >>>>> to be "results in"? >>>> >>>> Yes. Thanks. >>>> >>>>> -- section 3.1, last paragraph, first sentence: "The local >>>> addresses that >>>>> can be learned from Opaque TE LSAs." >>>>> >>>>> incomplete sentence. Is "that" spurious? >>>> >>>> Good catch. >>>> OLD >>>> The local addresses that can be learned from Opaque TE >>>> LSAs. That is, >>>> router address and TE interface addresses SHOULD NOT be advertised >>>> in the node IPv4 local prefix sub-TLV. >>>> NEW >>>> The local addresses that can be learned from Opaque TE >>>> LSAs (that is, >>>> the router address and TE interface addresses) SHOULD NOT be >>>> advertised in the node IPv4 local prefix sub-TLV. >>>> >>>>> section 3.2, first paragraph after the figure: "Length is >>>> set to Sum[n] [4 >>>>> + #32-bit words/4] where n is the >>>>> number of local prefixes included in the sub-TLV." >>>>> >>>>> I'm not sure I understand the expression. >>>> >>>> But you think you might? :-) >>>> >>>> Hard doing scientific notation in ASCII, isn't it? >>>> OLD >>>> Length is set to Sum[n][4 + #32-bit words/4] where n is the >>>> number of local prefixes included in the sub-TLV. The >>>> encoding of >>>> each prefix potentially using fewer than four 32-bit words is >>>> described below. >>>> NEW >>>> Length is set to the sum over all of the local prefixes >>>> included in >>>> the sub-TLV of (4 + (number of 32-bit words in the prefix)/ >>>> 4 ). >>>> The encoding of each prefix potentially using fewer than four >>>> 32-bit words is described below. >>> >>> correct. >>> >>>>> -- section 4.1, 3rd paragraph: >>>>> >>>>> Please expand LSC and PSC on first use. >>>> >>>> oke >>>> >>>>> -- section 6, 3rd paragraph: >>>>> >>>>> s/informtation/information >>>> >>>> oke >>>> >>>>> -- idnits reports the following: >>>> >>>> Who can keep up with the IPR change rate? >>>> All IPR notices correct at time of submission. >>>> No doubt they will be updated and correct many times in the >>>> next weeks. >>> >>> is there something specific here to be done from my side ? >>> >>> much thanks, >>> -dimitri. >>>> Many thanks, >>>> Adrian >>>> >>>> >> >
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-g… Ben Campbell
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-cca… Adrian Farrel
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-cca… PAPADIMITRIOU Dimitri
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-cca… Ben Campbell
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-cca… Ben Campbell
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-cca… Adrian Farrel
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-cca… Ben Campbell