[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-pwe3-iccp-stp-04

[Brian E Carpenter <[e-mail]>]

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Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-iccp-stp-04.txt
Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
Review Date: 2015-09-15
IETF LC End Date: 2015-09-23
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Summary: Ready with issues
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Comment:
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It's impossible for a reviewer who is not expert in the details
of 802.1Q to check many details in this draft, so I didn't.

Major Issues:
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The draft does not properly explain the theory of operation.
The messages are defined but it is not explained when a spanning
tree is formed. Section 4 does not help with this. I think it
should be explained at the end of the Use Case section.

The main normative reference appears to be IEEE 802.1Q-2005. The current
standard is IEEE 802.1Q-2014, which appears to be very different.
I think this should be discussed in the text to avoid confusion.

> 3.6. STP Synchronization Data TLV
...
> When the total size of the TLVs to be transmitted
> exceeds the maximal size of a fragment, these TLVs SHOULD be divided
> into multiple sets, delimited by multiple pairs of STP
> Synchronization Data TLVs, and filled into multiple fragments.

There needs to be discussion of what happens if a fragment
is lost.

Minor Issues:
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> 3.2.1. STP Disconnect Cause sub-TLV
...
>       - Disconnect Cause String
>
>        Variable length string specifying the reason for the disconnect,
>        to be used for operational purposes.

Should it be specified whether this is ASCII, UTF-8,...?

> 3.3.1. STP System Config
...
>       - MAC Address

Excuse my ignorance, but are there any scenarios where this would need
to be EUI-64?

Nits:
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Please expand Spanning Tree Protocol in the main title.

Abbreviation PE used but not defined. Also, "provider edge" means an edge,
which is an abstract concept, not a device. If the draft is discussing
specific devices, it should say "PE device" or "PE router" or "PE switch".

Abbreviation AC used but not defined.

Abbreviation CE used but not defined.