[Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-nottingham-rfc5988bis-07

Stewart Bryant <stewart.bryant@gmail.com> Mon, 24 July 2017 16:46 UTC

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Reviewer: Stewart Bryant
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-nottingham-rfc5988bis-07
Reviewer: Stewart Bryant
Review Date: 2017-07-24
IETF LC End Date: 2017-05-26
IESG Telechat date: 2017-08-03

Summary: Ready except for some confusing IANA text - please see below.

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 

I find the following text very confusing:

   IANA will direct any incoming requests regarding the registry to this
   document and, if defined, the processes established by the expert(s);
   typically, this will mean referring them to the registry Web page.
   Note that the expert(s) are allowed (as per Section 2.1.1.1) to
   define additional fields to be collected in the registry.

You cannot direct a request to a document, and I am not sure you collect things
in registry. It would be useful to take another look at the above text.