[Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsvwg-quickstart-06.txt
Sally Floyd <sallyfloyd@mac.com> Tue, 03 October 2006 13:17 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsvwg-quickstart-06.txt
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Francis - > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Many thanks for the review! We have made all of the editing changes that you suggested, and I will post the revised draft to the Quick-Start web page in a day or two (after all of the co-authors have had a change to see all of the changes). Two items that are left are the two items requiring feedback from v6ops or IPv6 people. Some detailed feedback is below. > Comments: I have two major concerns and some minor comments: > * the overview (section 2.1, pages 15-17) fails to introduce the > real protocol: no mention of the report or of the fact the > response is carried in a TCP option, at the opposite of request > and report. So when a new reader reaches the page 20 he is lost > (at least I was the first time :-). > I believe it is easy to fix, the only issue is to get a "fresh" > reader to check the new text... I have make these changes, but I don't really think that it needs a "fresh" reader to check it out. Section 2.1 had a general discussion of "transport-level mechanisms to inform the sender of the status of the Quick-Start Request", and I added some sentences making it explicit that for TCP, this is done with the Quick-Start Response option in the TCP header. > * the IPv6 part needs to be improved: I suggest to ask in the mailing > list(s) or the WG chairs, perhaps more v6ops than ipv6 as questions > are more about concrete details than protocol theory. > See below for some examples of this concern. Yep, we put this on the TODO list. > - 4.1 page 28: there is a nice discussion about end point address > changes. As it should become common with IPv6 multi-homing IMHO > it should be read by IPv6 people... This is on the TODO list also. - Sally http://www.icir.org/floyd/ _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsvwg-q… Francis Dupont
- [Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsv… Sally Floyd
- [Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsv… Francis Dupont
- [Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsv… Sally Floyd
- [Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsv… Francis Dupont
- [Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsv… Mark Allman
- [Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsv… Sally Floyd
- [Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsv… Sally Floyd
- [Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsv… Francis Dupont
- [Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-tsv… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf… Brian E Carpenter