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Keyur Patel <keyur@arrcus.com> Tue, 20 February 2018 22:09 UTC

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From: Keyur Patel <keyur@arrcus.com>
To: Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bess-fat-pw-bgp-03.txt
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Hi Francis,

Thanks for the review. We will update the draft with your comments(nits) in next revision.

Regards,
Keyur

On 2/14/18, 7:58 AM, "Francis Dupont" <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> wrote:

    I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
    Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
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    Document: draft-ietf-bess-fat-pw-bgp-03.txt
    Reviewer: Francis Dupont
    Review Date: 2018/02/07
    IETF LC End Date: 20180209
    IESG Telechat date: unknown
    
    Summary: Ready
    
    Major issues: None
    
    Minor issues: None
    
    Nits/editorial comments: 
     - Abstract page 1: please expand PE abbrev
    
     - PoC page 2 and 4 page 7: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
    
     - 1 page 3: please introduce PE abbrev (it is not marked as well known
      in https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt, and
      Abstract and body are independent so an abbrev introduced in the Abstract
      should be introduced again in the body).
    
     - 1 page 3: ECMP is introduced twice (better than none :-).
    
     - 1 page 3: This draft -> This document (or specification ot ...).
      The RFC Editor should update this prior to the publication but
      making its job harder is not a good idea. So if you have another
      reason to update the document please fix this...
    
     -  1.1 page 4: RFC 2119 was updated by RFC 8174
    
     - 3 page 6: e.g. -> e.g.,
    
     - 3 page 7: i.e. -> i.e., (at end of line)
    
    Regards
    
    Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr

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