[Gen-art] Re: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-crisp-iris-xpc-04.txt

David,

Thanks for the feedback.  This is very helpful.

-andy

Black_David@emc.com wrote:
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for draft-ietf-crisp-iris-xpc-04.txt
> .
> 
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> 
> Please resolve these comments along with any other
> Last Call comments you may receive.
> 
> This draft is on the right track but has open issues,
> described in the review.
> 
> I found one open issue - Section 14's discussion of the use
> of SASL is incomplete, as it does not satisfy the requirements
> stated in Section 4 of RFC 4422.  See Section 4 of RFC 4422.
> 
> I also found a few minor concerns/nits:
> 
> Sections 5 and 6 ought to contain ASCII diagrams of the
> bit fields in the Block Header and Chunk Descriptor.
> 
> The discussion of chunk ordering in Section 6 on p.9
> combines restrictions on which chunk types may co-exist
> in a single block with requirements on ordering of those
> types within a block.  The combined discussion is somewhat
> confusing - it would be clearer if these two topics were
> separated - specify what is allowed within a single block,
> then specify ordering requirements for what is allowed.
> 
> Section 9 should state how the client and server determine
> whether TLS is to be used.  Since well-known ports are
> registered for both XPC and XPCS, this appears to be
> determined by client selection of which server port to use.
> 
> Thanks,
> --David
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