Re: [I2nsf] Request for I2NSF Draft Review

Hi  All,

I reviewed the "I2NSF Consumer Facing Interface YANG Data Model ."
This draft is well done for moving forward.

There are some editorial comments below:

[Abstract in Page 1]
In here, the "an administrative domain" is used just one time.
The definition of "administrative domain" should be provided in
appropriate chapter.
Or please give the example like I2NSF User group.

[Chapter 3.2 in Page 8]
"VoCN" acronym is used at first.
So, full words should be provided about the "VoCN."
and related references should be also described in the reference chapter.

[Chapter 4.4 in Page 14]
"The URLn-Group object SHALL have ~~~~" was described.
"URLn-Group" is maybe typo of "URL-Group."

[Chapter 5.1 in Page 15]
I think that "Signatures" should be kept carefully in a secure manner.
This draft said that this issue is out of scope.

Even though this issue is out of scope, this draft should show the proper
references.
I think that the DID, blockchain, and etc are good solutions.

[Chapter 12.1 in Page 69]
- xxx-semantics-19.txt >> RFC9110
- xxx-monitoring-data-model-19.txt >> xxx-monitoring-data-model-20.txt

[Chapter 12.1 in Page 70]
- xxx-rfc4960-bis-19.txt >> RFC9260

Thanks.

Best Regards,
Jungsoo, PARK

On Mon, Jul 25, 2022 at 10:32 PM 최윤철 <cyc79@etri.re.kr> wrote:

> Hi  I2NSF WG,
>
> I reviewed the I2NSF Registration Interface YANG Data Model.
> This draft is  well written and ready to be progressed for publication.
>
> One comment below.
>
> In '4.1.2. NSF access Information' an example of access information is
> described by including VLAN.
> But, in '5 Data Model' NSF access information, it was described only with
> IP and port.
> It would be good to add VLAN as an option in '5 Data Model' NSF access
> information
>
>
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: "Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong" <jaehoon.paul@gmail.com>
> To: "Penglin Yang" <yangpenglin@chinamobile.com>; "Meiling Chen" <
> chenmeiling@chinamobile.com>;
> Cc: "JungSoo Park" <pjs@etri.re.kr>; "Yunchul Choi" <cyc79@etri.re.kr>;
> "Patrick Lingga" <patricklink888@gmail.com>; "Jeong Hyeon Kim" <
> jeonghyeonkim92@gmail.com>; "Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong" <
> jaehoon.paul@gmail.com>;
> Sent: 2022-07-19 (화) 20:49:27 (UTC+09:00)
> Subject: Request for I2NSF Draft Review
>
> Hi Penglin and Meiling,
> How are you nowadays?
>
> I need reviewers for I2NSF Consumer Facing Interface YANG Data Model and
> I2NSF Registration Interface YANG Data Model under I2NSF WGLC:
>
> -  I2NSF Consumer Facing Interface YANG Data Model
>
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-i2nsf-consumer-facing-interface-dm-21
>
> -  I2NSF Registration Interface YANG Data Model
>
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-i2nsf-registration-interface-dm-18
>
> Could each of you review one of them, respectively, this week?
>
> If you can do it, you can give your review comments to the I2NSF mailing
> list.
>
> With this review, it will be helpful for you to proceed with
> our I2NSF remote attestation draft.
>
> Thanks.
>
> Best Regards,
> Paul
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