TSVDIR Review for draft-ietf-mpls-ip-options-05

["James M. Polk" <[e-mail]>]

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Summary:
This is a well written, concise and needed modification to MPLS.

That said, I don't understand why the 1st minor issue below is 
present. Recommend (fairly strongly) adding the

     "Document Updates: RFC 3031, RFC 3032"

as mentioned below on this first page of this RFC to be.


Transport Issues:
There are no issues


minor issues:
- S2 "Motivation", last sentence is

   "We believe that this document adds
   details that have not been fully addressed in [RFC3031] and [RFC3032]
   as well as complements [RFC3270], [RFC3443] and [RFC4950]. "

I find it surprising that this document does not formally update 3031 
and 3032, given that it is mandatory to implement, optional to 
invoke. ISTM, as an outsider to MPLS, this would in fact be the case 
given the impact of/to IP stacks not adhering to this proposed standard.

- Section 5.2 is about Router Alert Options, and states "At the time 
of this writing ...". I wonder if this subsection is valid, or needs 
another review against this IntArea ID
http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-intarea-router-alert-considerations-02
to still be valid in a month or two once the IntArea ID (currently in 
WGLC) is processed by the IESG and RFC-Editor?

IMO - these two docs are progressing near enough to each other to 
each consider what the other says - with or without a normative or 
informative reference in either or both docs to the other.


nits:
- I'm surprised to see the Abstract on page 2. I thought we 
collectively fixed the case in which the Abstract can be on any page 
other than page 1.

- at the page Footer, in the middle of the line, there isn't a "short 
document name" - which has been there on all previous well formed IDs 
and RFCs that I have seen (which of course is not all of them). It is 
recommended the authors pick a short form name for the subject of 
this doc for this location, such as

      LER Header Option Behaviors

- S3, 4th para, second to last sentence is:

   "First a downstream LSR may
   have not have sufficient IP routing information to forward the packet
   resulting in packet loss. "

recommend removing the first instance of "have". The sentence reads 
better without it.

- S3, 4th para, last two sentences
list a "First" and a "Second" reason correctly, but are missing 
required commas after each word (i.e., "First, ...", and "Second, ..." )

- S3, 5th para, 1st sentence is lacking commas here:

   "...FEC, yet are forwarded
   into an IP/MPLS network without being MPLS-encapsulated,
    present..."

- S5.1, last bullet has this:

   "...MPLS encapsulation at a ingress LER ..."
                           ^^^^^
s/a/an

James