Re: [Gen-art] Review of draft-holmberg-dispatch-mcptt-rp-namespace-03

Fernando Gont <fgont@si6networks.com> Fri, 16 December 2016 21:51 UTC

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Folks,

Apologies: wasn't sure whether the tool would insert the "boilerplate",
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Here's my review:


On 12/16/2016 06:46 PM, Fernando Gont wrote:
> Reviewer: Fernando Gont
> Review result: Ready with Nits
> 
> ** Technical **
> 
> * Section 3, pages 3-4:
>>    Intended algorithm for mcpttq is queuing.
>>
>>    New Warning cde: No.
>>
>>    New SIP response code: No.
> 
> Is this kind of thing really needed/required in the registry?
> 
> 
> 
> ** Editorial **
> 
> * Section 1, page 2:
>>    The third generation partnership project (3GPP)
> 
> May be you should capitalize these? (i.e., "Third Generation...")
> 
> 
> * Section 1, page 2:
>> In addition to this a commercial PTT
>>    service for non-professional use (e.g., groups of people on
> holiday)
> 
> Please insert a comma after "this".
> 
> 
> * Section 1, page 3:
>> MCPTT data transfer currently under development can
>>    benefit from a queueing mechanism.
> 
> "data transfer..." protocols?
> 
> 
> * Section 2, page 3:
>> The use of this namespace outside such network is
>>    undefined.
> 
> s/network/networks/
> 
> 
> * Section 5, page 5:
>> 5.  IANA Considerations
>>
>>    Abiding by the rules established within [RFC4412] and [RFC7134],
> this
>>    is an Informative RFC registering two new namespaces, their
>>    associated priority-values, and intended algorithms.
> 
> s/registering/creating/ ?
> 
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