draft-murchison-webdav-prefer-13

Stewart Bryant <stewart.bryant@gmail.com> Fri, 13 January 2017 16:27 UTC

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From: Stewart Bryant <stewart.bryant@gmail.com>
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Document: draft-murchison-webdav-prefer-13
Reviewer: Stewart Bryant
Review Date: 13 Jan 2016
IETF LC End Date: 16 January 2017
IESG Telechat date: 19 January 2017


Summary: Ready with nits

This is a well written document with two minor editorial issues 
remaining from the version previously reviewed.


Issues:

 From ID-nits:

   -- The draft header indicates that this document updates RFC7240,
      but the abstract doesn't seem to mention this, which it should.

   Specifically I think the nits checker is looking to see RFC724O
   called up in the Abstract.



=========
It says in section 5

5.  Implementation Status

    < RFC Editor: before publication please remove this section, the
    reference to [RFC7942], and any "URIs" section >

I think you ned the whole of section 9.3 to be deleted. If that is so
it would be clearer to the editor to say so.